Poem: I lost myself

by Feelings and Freedom | Oct 6, 2017 | Poetry | 22 comments



thunderous waves never plundered my spirits

neither hurricane ravaged my vigour

dusk never dawned encumbrance

for darkness shrouded my existence




unscathed by the disparaging world

I was wounded only one time

but contusions spurn to heal

I’ve been in pain ever since…




when your eyes probed mine

indicting me of betrayal

that moment…

that moment stagnated in time




that moment you sabotaged my love

that moment our hearts estranged

that moment I lost myself

I’ve been in pain ever since…

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22 Comments

kim881 on October 6, 2017 at 7:45 am

The link between waves and emotions fascinates me – the sea is a much used metaphor, which never loses its impact, with poets finding new ways to express it. and here you write ‘ thunderous waves never plundered my spirits’ – an original way to convey the emptiness of pain.
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 6, 2017 at 11:48 am
  
  Sea has always been my favourite. No matter how many times I’ve written about it, I still find it refreshing and deep as the sea itself. I am glad you could relate to it. Thanks Kim.
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Sabio Lantz on October 6, 2017 at 9:21 am

Very sad and self-involved
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 6, 2017 at 11:45 am
  
  Sad indeed..Thanks for reading
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D-Claire on October 6, 2017 at 11:03 am

That first stanza is masterful with the in-line rhymes. Oh, just glorious.
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 6, 2017 at 11:45 am
  
  Thanks Claire! I am glad you liked it. Have a great weekend!
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on October 6, 2017 at 12:25 pm

There is nothing more hurtful than betrayal… the pain is so strong here
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 6, 2017 at 1:49 pm
  
  True! The wounds of betrayal take time to heal. Thanks for your views. Have a great weekend!
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Beverly Crawford on October 6, 2017 at 3:34 pm

So sad to linger in the pain, eloquently expressed. Time to consider the lessons learned, close the chapter, and move on.
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 7, 2017 at 12:01 pm
  
  Thanks for your kind words dear. The poem is fictional..thankfully 😉
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confessionsofabratblog on October 6, 2017 at 3:39 pm

This line ” I was wounded only one time but contusions spurn to heal
I’ve been in pain ever since…” so much feel
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 7, 2017 at 12:00 pm
  
  Thanks dear. I am glad you liked it!
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Sangbad on October 6, 2017 at 4:41 pm

Completely different one from you…liked it a lot…
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 7, 2017 at 11:58 am
  
  Thanks Sang! Yes, trying different moods 🙂
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  - Sangbad on October 9, 2017 at 12:16 pm
    
    That is good to see i.e. read…
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    - Feelings and Freedom on October 9, 2017 at 1:10 pm
      
      🙂
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      - Sangbad on October 9, 2017 at 3:48 pm
        
        ⭐
Frank Hubeny on October 6, 2017 at 10:43 pm

I liked the line: “that moment stagnated in time”
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 7, 2017 at 11:57 am
  
  Thanks Frank. That’s the turning point of the poem 🙂
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Mary (tqhousecat) on October 7, 2017 at 1:43 am

I love the use of the sea and waves. I’ve been in pain ever since. I hope its just a poem and not your reality. Masterfully done.
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- Feelings and Freedom on October 7, 2017 at 11:56 am
  
  Thanks for your concern and lovely words Mary. It’s fictional 🙂
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Feelings and Freedom on October 9, 2017 at 6:21 am

Thanks Sanaa. I am glad it resonated with you.
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